The Mystery Sound
BANG! went a gunshot that woke me up with a scary face, my face was as ugly as a rhino, so I just ignored the loud noise and went to get myself some delicious hot cocoa with a side of marshmallows. While I was drinking my hot cocoa I heard another BANG! but it was even louder than the last one before so I followed the noise, as I got closer to the noise the hairs of the back of my neck stood up. I didn't know where it came from and I didn't find any clues because the sound had disappeared and it was a mystery what that noise was. I searched the house from top to toe what ever it was, it was gone and we will never know what it was.
To Be Continued......
This is a good story opener and you have used both onomatopoeia and a similie to achieve your learning intention. Ka pai Hannah!
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ReplyDeleteI loved reading your scary story but I think you need to change the title because it doesn't make sense. I think it should be The Mysterious Sound instead of The Mystery Sound
Talofa Lava Hannah, This is a good story opener your story opener is so interesting it is beautifully written and it so lovely to read I wish I could read more of your story opener
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